Iwrite: Twilight fan fic draft.
Edward disappears on a hunting trip. Everyone is worried because Alice didn’t see this happening. The Cullens go looking for him and leave Bella in the care of Jacob and the wolves.
Bella turns to Jacob for comfort. Sometime passes (Cullens are still trying to find Edward) Jacob falls in love with Bella, after while Bella gives into Jacobs advances and they become a couple.
After about 4 months Edward suddenly arrives back in Forks and rushes to see Bella only to find that she is with Jacob and that she is pregnant.
But where has Edward been? Why couldn’t the Cullens find him? Why didn’t Alice see him leaving? What is going to happen when Bella sees Edward? Who will she choose?
He always hated leaving me, and I hated him leaving too, but I could see the thirst in his eyes. It was the usual façade of hiking on the weekend. Edward was going alone this time, but he said he would be back as soon as he could.
Alice and I were going to have a sleep over. I dreaded these, it was always so tiring being her Barbie doll to dress up and put make up on.
“Be safe, try not to hurt yourself while I’m gone.” Edward said with a smirk on his face.
“I’ll do my best.” I said returning his smirk.
With a quick but passionate kiss he was gone. And I was on my way to Alice’s for our sleep over. When I arrived Alice was at the front door waiting for me with an excited smile across her face.
“Hi Bella!”
“Hey Alice, so what’s the plan for tonight?” I said hesitantly, hoping it wouldn’t be too painful.
“I thought we could paint our nails and give each other facials.”
“Hmm sure!” I said trying to hide my discomfort; Alice knows I’m not one for girlie things.
cool sounding really good, my only thing would be make sure the space of time is long enough for it to be believable that Bella has forgotten Edward. other than thats its shaping up really well, i like it heaps
ReplyDeleteLove the way you have captured the essence of the original book. I like how you have been able to advance the story quickly, no time waisted on un-needed drivle. Keep it up!!
ReplyDeleteThis sounds really good. Its hard to stray so far from the Twilight plot (I'm guessing, or does this really happen?) and still make it believable, but you're pulling it off by writing true to the characters. And the intrigue -- betrayal and a love triangle and Bella's pregnant! Can't wait to read what happens next.
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